Hoehne school is better than Trinidad

My mother says, “Trinidad has bad teachers and that the students are disrespectful and rude.” That’s why she doesn’t what me to go to Trinidad school. She had heard excellent things about Hoehne so she decided to send me to Hoehne. thesis] Hoehne is a better school then Trinidad because we have a Safer school, we have fantastic sports programs, and we have really good academics.
Body paragraph 1[topic sentence] Hoehne sports are fantastic. [SDS#1]our volleyball team won state two years in a row[E] they worked as a team and they didn’t give up.[SDS#2] our football team made it to the semi-finals vs. Merino [E] they worked together, they practiced longer, and they ran fast.[SDS#3]Hoehne also has better coaches[E] they spend a lot of time on our teams, and they make sure that we know what we are doing and they make sure we know all the right drills. [SDS#4] We have also have better strategies[E] We do stuff differently.
Body paragraph 2 [Topic Sentence] In addition to great sports Hoehne has excellent academics. [SDS #1] Our teachers known a lot more[E] they make sure we know what we are doing so we could get good grades. [SDS#2]we also have a smaller school [E] we have smaller classes so we learn more. [SDS#3] the students at Hoehne work harder. [E] we like the teachers and we make sure we are eligible to do stuff. We also try our hardest.
We work harder on the field, that makes our fantastic sports teams. We try harder in the classrooms, which makes better academics. We are a safer school in result that makes a safer community. Now you decide which school would you choose to send your children to, Hoehne or Trinidad? In result we have an excellent school. Our school rules really take part In our school. Be safe, be respectful, be responsible, and be on task.